Tales of the Twister Domain - Ibis (Book 1)

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Welcome! This is where I'll be posting the chapters for a book I'm writing, "Tales of the Twister Domain". This thread will concern the first book in the series, Ibis. Feel free to comment on the style, approach, writing, etc! Here's the prologue:

Prologue

     Ibis sighed as he trotted outside the den. Being a father is hard work... he thought.
     "Having fun, huh?" Coco asked with a chuckle.
     "ACK! Oh," Ibis said, fur-on-end. "It's just you..."
     The two sat for a moment, thinking.
     "You look like you need a break. Your fur's all mangled, you could almost pass for a giant squirrel," Coco said, attempting to comfort Ibis. "I mean, the bags under your eyes are proof enough! How about... you take one day off a season? And don't even think about making it a festival day!"
     "Alright... I guess..." Ibis said, yawning. I really need to take a bath, Ibis thought. I bet I smell like rabbit dung...
     "Y'know what? I think I'll stay out here for a little longer, and watch the fireflies..."
     "Alright but..." Coco said, frowning.
     "But what?" Ibis asked.
     "Oh, nevermind. Good night!"
     Before Ibis knew it, he was drifting off to sleep. But a good night's sleep eluded him, his only dreams being nightmares of thunder and lightning striking the Sacred Temple, earthquakes collapsing the Mountain Domain, and the Forest Guardian fading from existence...

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Chapter 1

     Ibis raced to the temple, ignoring his stomach's rumbles. I have to get there! He thought. Just a bit farther... Suddenly he skidded to a stop. Where the Sacred Temple once was, there was now only rubble! "Nonononononono..." He said, staring at the destruction infront of him. He barely even noticed the murmurs of the other cats gathering round. Suddenly, there was a flash of blue light...
     Everyone stared as the Forest Guardian appeared, their manifestation flickering and fading from and back into existence. "I do not have much time to speak with you all," The Guardian said, silencing the crowd with a flick of their tail. "So I must make it quick. This place is no longer safe. You must venture out, and find a new place to live..."
    The Forest Guardian suddenly disappeared, bringing a wave of gasps and murmurs, before fading back into existence. "You must construct me a new temple, so I can bind myself to the earth once more. Each cat can choose for themselves a leader, one to follow and listen to. But you must hurry! My strength is fading as we spea-" The Guardian's spirit suddenly flickered before vanishing completely.
     "The Forest Guardian is right! We must all choose a new leader for ourselves, and venture out to find a new home!" Coco shouted, jumping up to where the Guardian had stood just seconds before.
     "He's right!" Ibis yelled, jumping up with him. "We will split into groups! Myself, Leo, Alisa, and Mayor will all lead separate groups!"
     Many more murmurs arose from the crowd. "I'd like a beachy environment." "What!?! But this place is perfectly fine..." "Why not just rebuild the temple?"
     "Everyone! Quiet!" Ibis roared with the strength of a lion. "The Forest Guardian has deemed this land no longer safe, and we are to abide by their rules! Now, pick a leader to follow, or stay here and suffer! It's your choice!"
     The group of cats fell as silent as a rabbit, and they slowly gathered into groups.
     "Now, each leader will pick a direction to travel in, or they can disband! To begin with, my group will travel to the east." Ibis said, flicking his tail in the direction he chose.
     A bit later, each group had settled on a direction to travel in, and had gathered enough herbs and prey to last at least a season. How did I do that? Ibis wondered as his group walked. It was almost as if I was speaking with the strength of the Forest Guardian...

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Oh yeah, I should probably put plans somewhere XD

Prologue - Shortly after Cardinal/Finch are born
Chap. 1 - Shortly after the earthquake/storm that destroyed the Sacred Temple
Chap. 2 - Think tutorial
Chap. 3 - Settling into the Wildwood
Chap. 4 - First few bundles completed
Chap. 5 - Ruins of Loss
Chap. 6 - First RM completed
Chap. 7 - Second RM completed, more bundles completed
Chap. 8 - Finch starts dating Alabaster, Ruins of Sorrow
Chap. 9 - First/Second RM kits, Invasion storyline begins
Chap. 10 - Even more bundles completed, Ruins of Reclusion, Third RM completed

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Chap. 2 - Chap. 7, and the Dark Ruins chapters will be much bigger. hopefully

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RMs:
B&B
E&C
K&T
S&L

[Joey]

Ooo love the story so far!